I witnessed a murder just now

[Bushy]

I was riding home from town today on the bus, listening to music and not paying attention to anything. As we were stopping at one of the bus stops, a girl in the back started screaming. I looked back and saw her pointing out the window, and I followed her stare. Out in an unfenced garden were 3 guys. Two of them standing, one of them was on the ground bloody. The taller of the two men had a baseball bat and was about ready to smash it into his head again, when they realized a whole busload of people were looking at them. As the bus driver got on his radio thingy to get the police the other man, who hadnt been doing anything, took a pistol out of his pocket and shot the guy in the head. At this point the whole bus was in shock and glued to the morbid scene. The two men got into a car and sped off. When I came home I was visibly shaken. I told her what I had just seen. Then my mom got scared, she said "You're moving with your auntie and uncle in Bel-Air." I whistled for a cab and when it came near, the license plate said "Fresh" and it had dice in the mirror. If anything I could say that this cab was rare but I thought "Nah, forget it, Yo homes, to Bel-Air!" I pulled up to the house about seven or eight and I yelled to the cabby, "Yo homes, smell ya later!" I looked at my kingdom, I was finally there, to sit on my throne as the prince of Bel-Air

[ClassicTyler]

Again, I almost believed this. dawkins;

[ncba93ivyase]

Fail.

First off, no text walls.

Second, Bel-Air can't be visible without scrolling. They need to at least read a few paragraphs.

[MARIOMANIAC21]

 It needs to be longer and like Lawlz said, the Bel-air part needs to be covered up.

[Wrench]

Too easily discovered. Break it into paragraphs and make sure Bel Air is in a good spot.

[Bushy]

Fail.

First off, no text walls.

Second, Bel-Air can't be visible without scrolling. They need to at least read a few paragraphs.

Damn edumacate;

Well I tried

[Kalahari Inkantation]

The first thing I saw was "Bel-Air". Absolutely horrible.

[demonprince]

SUX

[Tomboh]

Terrible Bel-Air.

Way to short, and I could easily tell it was a Bel-Air in the first sentence.

[Feynman]

Well, a few months back I was at my cousin's house. After a few minutes I heard a gunshot, a glass break, and a car drifting. I walk outside and see that there's a dead guy in a car and cops are everywhere. I told my mom what happened and she got scared, she said "You're moving with your auntie and uncle in Bel-Air." I whistled for a cab and when it came near, the license plate said "Fresh" and it had dice in the mirror. If anything I could say that this cab was rare but I thought "Nah, forget it, Yo homes, to Bel-Air!" I pulled up to the house about seven or eight and I yelled to the cabby, "Yo homes, smell ya later!" I looked at my kingdom, I was finally there, to sit on my throne as the prince of Bel-Air.

[InbredPsychosis]

booooo

ancient meme
unoriginal
skipped to end cause i knew you would pull shit like this

I'm disappointed.

[Feynman]

booooo

ancient meme
unoriginal
skipped to end cause i knew you would pull shit like this

I'm disappointed.

Well, he saw Lawlz's topic and he decided he wanted some attention. 12-year-old-see-12-year-old-do.

[InbredPsychosis]

Well, he saw Lawlz's topic and he decided he wanted some attention. 12-year-old-see-12-year-old-do.

Bassir, it is up to you to make Boyah less predictable/like NSider than it is right now.

YOU HAVE THE POWER, AND THE AVATAR THAT STARES INTO MY SOUL AND FILLS ME WITH RAGE.

[Feynman]

Bassir, it is up to you to make Boyah less predictable/like NSider than it is right now.

YOU HAVE THE POWER, AND THE AVATAR THAT STARES INTO MY SOUL AND FILLS ME WITH RAGE.

I would like your help with this mission.

[Bushy]

booooo

ancient meme
unoriginal
skipped to end cause i knew you would pull shit like this

I'm disappointed.

Well, he saw Lawlz's topic and he decided he wanted some attention. 12-year-old-see-12-year-old-do.

TOO MANY HYPHENS