Tell me how my English paper is.

[hotlikesauce.]

We had to do a myth about why something is the way it is.



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Why dolphins make the noise they do.

By Kevin Byington.




One day Mr. Dolphin wanted to go to the store. He went to the underwater dolphin Wal-Mart and parked in the dolphin lot.

As he walked inside, they had sample sandwiches of beef, cheddar, and catfish. He tried one, and it got stuck in his throat. He didn't take much mind to it, and continued shopping.

He went through each aisle, got his daily servings of veggies, carrots, chocolate and dolphin-nip. Down one aisle he found some toy cars and a ping pong ball. As he walked through the last aisles, he found some kitty litter ice cream (His favorite!).

He proceeded through final aisle, and made his way to the register. He heard on the radio "Hey Mr. Dolphin". He started to hum the words "Oh.. It's when you swim to me...."

The register dolphin was a fast one, and before Mr. Dolphin knew it, everything was accounted for. He started to pull out his wallet, and noticed that the sandwich was stuck in his throat. He went to the back to get a drink, and found some hair tonic.

Considering that this would help him grow his braided beard goatee, he grabbed a can and swam his fins off to the register. As he mistakenly forgot to read "Not for dolphins of any age" (Even though this was the dolphin Wal-Mart), he gulped down the whole can.

He started thanking the register, but a loud screechy like squeak came out. He tried talking again. And it still didn't work!

He became furious and enraged. So furious and outraged that he bought an infinity supply of hair tonic. What would he do with that? Why! Infiltrate every dolphins house in Dolphinia! He was so mad that he wanted every dolphin in the dolphiny land of dolphins to talk like him.

Eventually, dolphins babies were born with this defect, and it became a standard. Mr. Dolphin had actually made every dolphiny dolphin in Dolphinia lose their voice!

[Det in F♯ Major]

The words in your title should all have capital first letters except for the word 'the'.

Also specify what he tried in the second...paragraph. And also, when someone chokes on something, how do they NOT pay mind to it? It could ultimiately end their lives.

And carrots are veggies, Kevin. 

Seventh paragraph, I think you mean cashier instead of register.

"He became furious and enraged. So furious and outraged" Use the same word, since you're using furious in both sentences.

"Why! Infiltrate every dolphins house in Dolphinia!" It should be "Why, infiltrate every dolphin's house in Dolphinia!"

[hotlikesauce.]

The words in your title should all have capital first letters except for the word 'the'.

Oh yeah

[Det in F♯ Major]

ya i editid mi poast so reed it 

i luv inglish

[CutLess]

Is this for 2nd graders or something?

Because your tone is way too happy-go-lucky.  I mean, if you really like writing with that tone, go ahead; however, I'd absolutely never write in that way.

[Houdini]

Well, the basis of the paper is faulty. Species can't actually inherit acquired traits.

[Det in F♯ Major]

Well, the basis of the paper is faulty. Species can't actually inherit acquired traits.

haven't you seen teh hills have eyes 

[YPrrrr]

We had to do a myth about why something is the way it is.



(Tell my if the font doesn't work)



Why dolphins make the noise they do.

By Kevin Byington.




One day Mr. Dolphin wanted to go to the store. He went to the underwater dolphin Wal-Mart and parked in the dolphin lot.

As he walked inside, they had sample sandwiches of beef, cheddar, and catfish. He tried one, and it got stuck in his throat. He didn't take much mind to it, and continued shopping.

He went through each aisle, got his daily servings of veggies, carrots, chocolate and dolphin-nip. Down one aisle he found some toy cars and a ping pong ball. As he walked through the last aisles, he found some kitty litter ice cream (His favorite!).

He proceeded through final aisle, and made his way to the register. He heard on the radio "Hey Mr. Dolphin". He started to hum the words "Oh.. It's when you swim to me...."

The register dolphin was a fast one, and before Mr. Dolphin knew it, everything was accounted for. He started to pull out his wallet, and noticed that the sandwich was stuck in his throat. He went to the back to get a drink, and found some hair tonic.

Considering that this would help him grow his braided beard goatee, he grabbed a can and swam his fins off to the register. As he mistakenly forgot to read "Not for dolphins of any age" (Even though this was the dolphin Wal-Mart), he gulped down the whole can.

He started thanking the register, but a loud screechy like squeak came out. He tried talking again. And it still didn't work!

He became furious and enraged. So furious and outraged that he bought an infinity supply of hair tonic. What would he do with that? Why! Infiltrate every dolphins house in Dolphinia! He was so mad that he wanted every dolphin in the dolphiny land of dolphins to talk like him.

Eventually, dolphins babies were born with this defect, and it became a standard. Mr. Dolphin had actually made every dolphiny dolphin in Dolphinia lose their voice!

3rd paragraph: it should be "getting," not "got"
5th paragraph: what det said

Also, it is way too childish for whatever grade you're in, unless part of the assignment is to write it for like a 3 year old

[Kalahari Inkantation]

Like everyone else has said, it's very childish. The title could be better, and if I were choking on something, I'd pay attention to it.
Also, what's a "Mr. Dolphin" doing buying toy cars and a ping pong ball?
and why on earth would you drink hair tonic

[Selkie]

I really don't know whether or not this is a joke...

[Daddy]

Just start over.

[The artist formally known]

commit suicide

[Houdini]

Yeah, considering your age you should be ashamed of this.

[Det in F♯ Major]

Also why would Dolphin Wal-Mart sell products harmful to dolphins. 

[Geno]

Mippo is just asking for a dipshitting