some shit i just thought up...
It blankets the world with a sheet of white
Long after the sun has passed
It remains a watcher of human dreams
Illuminating signs on the path
But when it goes down for a quick sleeping break
The true glory of life unfolds
A canvas of glimmering pieces of joy
Our dreams find a whole new abode
ur turn
sounds sort of ready and the breathe-in kind, too. Cold air something.
poetry isn't my thing but we had to write one for class on Monday about "What isn't there"
[spoiler]there are pools that run rivers of blood through your body and across state lines
only we can see them
you try to explain how everything is connected
but i can't understand so i focus on something smaller,
a freckle on your knee,
and lay my head down
you keep it to yourself.
once you said that when we hold hands
a bug appears
and it crawls along your palm
you try to suppress a laugh but you could never stop it,
it tickles you on the inside
and i laugh too because
i have no idea what you're talking about[/spoiler]
the rain falls down
on my face
down my face
onto the ground
The end.
meaningless
sentence
fragments
i wrote a haiku
just to post in this here thread.
i hope you like it :0
Haha, I don't think so. I don't post poetry on forums anymore. Nobody knows how to critique them anyway. And besides, most people here seem to think that poetry is pointless because they don't understand it, so I find it rather pointless to bother.
more like faggotry amirite
Yeah, pretty much what Kaz said. I don't know what good poetry looks like, and how to write anything decent.
this black man walked past
he stole my bike
my woman
and the like
Oh
How did I get here again
It seems to draw me every so often
This place
I am reminded by
Notifications
I am reminded by
The users
The members
The lovers of
This place
I am drawn for the fleeting moment
It seems to draw me every so often
This place
I am drawn by
Notifications
I am drawn by
The users
The members
The lovers of
This place
The fleeting moment is passing
It seems to draw me every so often
The fleeting moment has
Passed
I bade thee farewell for a few months again.
no zovi stay
I was actually surprised to learn
that this
is considered
poetry
if
you
randomly push
down on the enter key
breaking up sentences at the worst
part and continuing them after you
press enter some more times
Quote from: Staplerlock on October 08, 2008, 04:48:06 PM
I was actually surprised to learn
that this
is considered
poetry
if
you
randomly push
down on the enter key
breaking up sentences at the worst
part and continuing them after you
press enter some more times
Technically, yes, but it's certainly not
good poetry.
Quote from: ThunderKaz on October 08, 2008, 04:50:12 PM
Technically, yes, but it's certainly not good poetry.
Thats not the way you say something thats supposed to artistic is bad! You say its
interesting. Then you sound more like a dick.
Quote from: Staplerlock on October 08, 2008, 04:48:06 PM
I was actually surprised to learn
that this
is considered
poetry
if
you
randomly push
down on the enter key
breaking up sentences at the worst
part and continuing them after you
press enter some more times
Um...you have to do it right though. In that type of freeform poetry, new lines mean either pauses, sudden changes in thought, abstract disruptions of flow of conciousness, and emphasis on certain important symbols or phrases.
Quote from: Zovistograt on October 08, 2008, 06:00:59 PM
Um...you have to do it right though. In that type of freeform poetry, new lines mean either pauses, sudden changes in thought, abstract disruptions of flow of conciousness, and emphasis on certain important symbols or phrases.
Unless of course you're trying to be an avant-garde asshole by avoiding all the guidelines.
Quote from: ThunderKaz on October 08, 2008, 06:21:38 PM
Unless of course you're trying to be an avant-garde asshole by avoiding all the guidelines.
Which was what I was trying to get to. People like that usually shove the phrase "creative freedom" in your face when you say their stuff sucks.